雅思流程图的写作含范文深度点评.docx

Theillustrationsbelowshowhowchocolateisproduced.
Summarisetheinformaitonbyselectingandreportingthemainfeatures.
【高分范文及深度点评】
Thediagramshowsthestagesintheprocessofmakingchocolate.【所有的小作文第一句话都要用一般现在时。流程图必备三个词：process：整个过程,stage：阶段，step：步骤】
Chocolatecomesfromthecacaotree,whichisgrowninpartsofSouthAmerica,AfricaandIndonesia.【开头不能冲上来就直接介绍cacaotree，而是通过主题词chocolate引出，否则显得太唐突】【流程图特点之一：介绍过程要使用一般现在时】【流程图特点之二：大量使用定语从句，将有关联的两句话连接。】【流程图特点之三：大量使用被动语态】Thetreeproduceslargeredpodswhichcontainwhitecocoabeans.Firstly,【流程图特点之四：使用一些表示顺序的连接词】whenthepodsareripe,theyareharvested,thebeansareremovedandtheyarefermentedforseveraldaysinlargewoodenboxes.【三个句子的并列：“句子A，句子Band句子C”。】Duringthefermentingprocess,thebeansturnbrown.【流程图特点之五：要适当地添加个别图中没有交代但能从图片中直接读出来的的一些内容，否则可能达不到字数要求。但是一定要把握尺度，千万不要加上自己的主观观点，否则会扣分】
Next,thebrownbeansarespreadinthesuntodry.Theyarethenputinlargesacksandtransportedbytrainorlorry.Afterthis,thebeansaretakentoachocolatefactorywheretheyareroastedinanovenattemperaturesofbetween250and350degreeCelsius.
Afterbeingroasted,thebeansarecrushedandtheoutershellisremoved.Thispartisnotneededformakingchocolate.Finally,theinnerpartofthebeanispressedandliquidchocolateisproduced.

【流程图特点之六：一般不需要写总结】
最后再总结一下流程图的特点：
特点一：现在时
特点二：定语从句
特点三：被动语态
特点四：顺序词
特点五：适当添加
特点六：无总结
雅思流程图范文《砖块的制作》(含9分范文及考官点评）
WRITINGTASK1
Youshouldspendabout20minutesonthistask.
Thediagrambelowshowstheprocessbywhichbricksaremanufacturedforthebuildingindustry.
Summarisetheinformationbyselectingandreportingthemainfeatures,andmakecomparisonswhererelevant.
Writeatleast150words.
Brickmanufacturing

*Clay:typeofstickyearththatisusedformakingbricks,pots,etc.
【满分范文】
Theprocessbywhichbricksaremanufacturedforthebuildingindustrycanbeoutlinedinsevenconsecutivesteps.Firsttherawmaterial,clay,whichwasjustbelowthesurfaceofsoilincertainclay-richareashastobedugupbyadigger.

Thenthelumpsofclayareplacedonametalgridinordertobreakupthebigchunksofclayintomuchsmallerareas,whichfallthroughthemetalgridontoaroller,whosemotionfurthersegregatesthebitsofclay