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TR6.0Answerallpartsofthetask5addressesthetaskonlypartially;theformatmaybeinappropriateinplacesPresentaclearpositionthroughoutthetask6presentsarelevantpositionalthoughtheconclusionsmaybecomeunclearorrepetitiveExtendandsupportmainideas7presents,extendsandsupportsmainideas,buttheremaybeatendencytoovergeneraliseand/orsupportingideasmaylackfocusCC5.5Paragraph6usesparagraphing,butnotalwayslogicallyLogicalorganizationofessay6arrangesinformationandideascoherentlyandthereisaclearoverallprogressionCohesivedevices5makesinadequate,inaccurateorover-useofcohesivedevicesLR7.0Range7usesasufficientrangeofvocabularytoallowsomeflexibilityandprecisionAccuracy7mayproduceoccasionalerrorsinwordchoice,spellingand/orwordformationGRA7.0GrammaticalRange7usesavarietyofcomplexstructuresAccuracyofgrammar7hasgoodcontrolofgrammarandpunctuationbutmaymakeafewerrorsScore（四项所得分）25.5/6.5OtherItemsAffectingScore（扣分项）UnderlengthxNo.ofwords285Penalty0.0Off-topicxMemorized——Illegible——OverallBandScore(最终分数)6.5=6.5–0.0
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Question:Somepeoplebelievethatchildrenshouldbeallowedtostayathomeandplayuntiltheyaresixorsevenyearsold.Othersbelievethatitisimportantforyoungchildrentogotoschoolassoonaspossible.Whatdoyouthinkaretheadvantagesofattendingschoolfromayoungage?
Analysis:QuestiontypeDiscussionTopicSomepeoplebelievethatchildrenshouldbeallowedtostayathomeandplayuntiltheyaresixorsevenyearsold.
Othersbelievethatitisimportantforyoungchildrentogotoschoolassoonaspossible.RealwritingtasksDiscusswhysomepeoplebelievethatchildrenshouldbeallowedtostayathomeandplayuntiltheyaresixorsevenyearsold.
Discusswhyothersbelievethatitisimportantforyoungchildrentogotoschoolassoonaspossible.
Discusstheadvantagesofattendingschoolfromayoungage.Synonymsorrelatedwords
People–individ