赏析：GMAT与GRE满分作文揭秘.docx

赏析：GMAT与GRE满分作文揭秘

第一篇：赏析：GMAT与GRE满分作文揭秘学习GMAT/GRE写作往往离不开“北美范文”，但其中良莠不齐，并非篇篇能称之为“范”，毕竟它们不是ACT/ETS所钦定的文章。如此说来，OfficialGuide上的范文就弥足珍贵，无论6分的还是5分、4分的都要仔细分析，尤其是其中所给与的分析和评论更是要细细体味，领悟其精神，然后用心实践。下面是一篇官方给出满分的ARGUMENT范文，我们来一起赏析，看看它为何能scoredsix（先读文章，再看我的点评）Thefollowingappearedaspartofanarticleinadailynewspaper:“Mostcompanieswouldagreethatastheriskofphysicalinjuryoccurringonthejobincreases,thewagespaidtoemployeesshouldalsoincrease.Henceitmakesfinancialsenseforemployerstomaketheworkplacesafer:theycouldthusreducetheirpayrollexpensesandsavemoney.”Discusshowwellreasonedyoufindthisargument.Inyourdiscussionbesuretoanalyzethelineofreasoningandtheuseofevidenceintheargument.Forexample,youmayneedtoconsiderwhatquestionableassumptionsunderliethethinkingandwhatalternativeexplanationsorcounterexamplesmightweakentheconclusion.Youcanalsodiscusswhatsortofevidencewouldstrengthenorrefutetheargument,whatchangesintheargumentwouldmakeitmorelogicallysound,andwhat,ifanything,wouldhelpyoubetterevaluateitsconclusion.首段Thisargumentstatesthatitmakesfinancialsenseforemployerstomaketheworkplacesaferbecausebymakingtheworkplacesaferthenlowerwagescouldbepaidtoemployees.Thisconclusionisbasedonthepremisethatasthelistofphysicalinjuryincreases,thewagespaidtoemployeesshouldalsoincrease.However,thereareseveralassumptionsthatmaynotnecessarilyapplytothisargument.Forexample,thecostsassociatedwithmakingtheworkplacesafemustoutweightheincreasedpayrollexpensesduetohazardousconditions.Also,onemustlookattheplausabilityofimprovingtheworkenvironment.Andfinally,becausemostcompaniesagreethatastheriskofinjuryincreasessowillwagesdoesn'tnecessarilymeanthattheallcompanieswhichhavehazardousworkenvironmentsagree.中间段1Thefirstissuetobeaddressediswhetherincreasedlaborcostsjustifylargecapitalexpenditurestoimprovetheworkenvironment.Clearlyonecouldarguethatifmakingtheworkplacesafewouldcostanexorbitantamountofmoneyincomparisontoleavingtheworkplaceasisandpayingslightlyincreasedwagesthanitwouldnotmakesensetoimprovetheworkenvironment.Forexample