托福作文2写作错误市公开课金奖市赛课一等奖课件.pptx

AcademicWriting1.省略Wealthyparentsshouldn't
spoiltheirchildren.

Shouldn’t
I’m
Can’t
He’s
Shouldn’t→shouldnot
I’m→Iam
Can’t→cannot
He’s→heis/hehas
hewas
2.Informallanguage

Today,newspapers
reportlotsofcrimesin
horribledetails.lotsof

ahostof
avastnumberof
numerous

agreatdealof
agreatamountof

3.Spelling

英美词汇差别英式美式

seze/ce
analyseanalyze
civilisecivilize
practisepractice
globaliseglobalize

英式美式

ouror
colourcolor
neighbourneighbor
favouritefavorite
英式美式

长短
storeystory
dialoguedialog
archaeologyarcheology
jewellryjewelry
travellertraveler
4.词汇没有特色
例句1
Seriouscrimesharm
people’slives.

→severe
→offense/criminalact
→damage/destroy
undermine/jeopardize
→individuals/man/
mankind例句2

Theadvantagesofspace
researcharemorethanits
Disadvantages.

例句2

Theadvantagesofspace
researcharemorethanits
Disadvantages.

bemorethan
→outweigh例句3

Ourworldisbecomingmore
andmorereliantonmodern
Technology.moreandmore
→increasingly+adj
onarise5.句子无衔接
1.Theenvironmentisbecoming
worse.Wemustworktogetherto
dealwiththissituation.
分析句间关系

加衔接词

Theenvironmentisbecomingworse;
therefore,wemustworktogethertodeal
withthissituation.

2.Opinionsfromdifferentpeoplewillhelpusfinishourworkbetterandfaster,theiropinionscanserveasasoundinformationchannel,whichleadstoabettersolutiontoaproblem.2.Opinionsfromdifferentpeoplewillhelpusfinishourworksbetterandfaster,becausetheiropinionscanserveasasoundinformationchannel,whichleadstoabettersolutiontoaproblem.6.感情色彩过于强烈
loveletter式写作
So,weshouldmakesurethat
globalizationdoesnotharmourown
traditionalculture!

!改。

So不要和should连用，感情强烈。→therefore7.宗教作为引言
Wemustbefriendlytoothers
becausetheBiblesays,“treat
yourneighborsasyouwouldlike
tobetreated.”

引言：名人名言/公认观点

Bible圣经：信奉，非逻辑推理