专题十六 读后续写x.ppt

seemydadandUnclePaulridinghorses.Theylookedreallycool.
Intheafternoon,IaskedUnclePaulifIcouldtakeahorseride,andhesaidyes,aslongasmydadwentwithme.Iwasn'tgoingtotakeahorseridebymyselfanyway.So,mydadandIputonournewcowboyhats,gotonourhorses,andheadedslowlytowardsthemountains.“Don'tbelateforsupper,”UnclePaulcried,“andkeeptothetracksothatyoudon'tgetlost!”“OK!”mydadcriedback.AfterawhileUnclePaulandhisfarmhousewereoutofsight.Itwassopeacefulandquietandthecolorsofthebrownrocks,thedeepgreenpinetrees,andthelateafternoonsunmixedtocreateamagicscene.Itlookedlikeabeautifulwoven(编织的)blanketspreadoutuponthegroundjustforus.
注意:
1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右;
2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;
3.续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;
4.续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph1:
Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.

Paragraph2:
Wehadnoideawherewewereanditgotdark.

答案
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根据续写第一段所给的段首句Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.可知,本段
应该主要描写突然出现一只小兔子之后的故事。按照常理,突然出现的兔子一般会让马受惊。故本段应该描写马受惊后发生的事。
从第二段的段首句Wehadnoideawherewewereanditgotdark.可以看出,作者和父亲迷路了。那么本段的故事主要根据迷路之后的情况展开。本段的主要内容应该是从迷路到回家的故事。
写作时一定要注意以下两点:
第一,从本故事的发展来看,第一段是马受惊后发生的事,而第二段是迷路之后的故事,因此要注意人物心理和情感的描写。
第二,注意两段的逻辑关系。要注意第一段的内容,尤其是段尾的内容和第二段段首句之间的衔接要合理,即第一段的最后一定要有迷路的情节设计。Onepossibleversion:
Paragraph1:
Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.Thisunexpectedappearancefrightenedmyhorse,whichmadeitrunwildly.Itriedmybesttocontrolit,butinvain.FrightenedasIwas,I
triedtokeepmybalancetopreventmyselffromfallingoff.Fortunately,minuteslater,thehorsestoppedbeforeariver,outofbreath,andsodidI.Atthatmoment,mydadalsocameup.SeeingIwasOK,hewasquiterelieved.Butitwasclearthatwegotlost.
Paragraph2:
Wehadnoideawherewewereanditgotdark.Wedidn'tknowwherethefarmhousewas.Whatwecoulddowastogobackalongtheprevioustrackslowly.Butitwasreallydifficultforusinsuchadarksituation.Justaswewereatthepointofdesperation,weheardafaintvoicefromthedistance.“ItmustbeUnclePaul,”Isaid.Sowecriedbackwithexcitement.Finally,UnclePaulsafelybroughtusbackhome.Whatanamazingride!
精彩语句
1.精美词汇
invain白费力气previousadj.